Below you are gonna be able to find a poem withn the poem. For the first poem you need to read everything and for the second poem just read the bold letters.
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Should I? Or shouldn't I(N)? Do we stay trApped? Or do we escape?
In this WORLD WHERE crying is beIng weak, And feelings are being held captive . Where words A(M)re HELD SILENT, AND thoughts are BEGGING TOSCREAM. In this world WHERE a telephone vIbrates more than A(M) beating heart, In this world where we see more masks Than smiles.
Await the light, at the end of the tunnel, Fight! For the light at the end of the tunnel. Fight! For all those people who hide their wrists and ankles, Fight! Like someone who is HOLDING their last hold of breath Fight! Like someone who is trying to find their place in the world before they have to leave. Fight! Like a girl WAITING for her dad, Fight! Like a castaway gettIng to land. Fight! For all those people who HAVE LOST HOPE.
Wait. there's still hope. Tell all the seekers that their journey has finalized. They've made it. There's still HOPE. Gather all the hopeless and tell them to keep fIghting, Tell the castaway he is gonna get to land, Tell all the people that: They are A(M)lmost there. They'vemade it.
Now is your turn! Now you have to Escape! Now is your fight! Now is time to raise your voice, this is our fight! Show the dreamers that they can reach the stars, and the HOPELESS that there's still hope.
Artist Statement
Should I? Or shouldn’t I? This is the opening line in my poem and a question I asked myself constantly, pretty much every day to be precise. When I started writing this poem I wanted to write about something I deal with every day, it did not matter if it was something as simple as how I choose what I am going to wear that day or something more complex like how I choose to live my life and how the decisions I make on the present can affect my future. For this poem, I also wanted to write about something that inspires me and that is true to me. My goal is to hopefully with my poem, inspire people to live their lives at the fullest and try new things.
So it began… at first for me it was really challenging and scary to write all my feelings and express myself down in a blank piece of paper, and it was even scarier for me to think of people reading them and then giving me critiques, but as we started writing poems in Lori´s class and giving feedback to my classmates it became less difficult. Another challenge that I encounter writing this was trying to write my poem with metaphors or figurative language and more complex words and try to put the poetic devices in my poem, as English is my second language I found this extremely difficult but with a lot of patience and a dictionary I was able to overcome this and give my poem the boost it needed. For example, instead of saying that people have lost the ability to connect with each other and how they connect with their phones. I wrote, “In this world where a telephone vibrates more than a beating heart”.
When I started writing this poem I had so many ideas and topics I wanted to write about (love, optimism, diversity, being an exchange student, etc.) or incorporate in my poem but I finally decided to write about hope and the fight everyone has with themselves and how we should fight for all of those people who can´t. My idea was to write a one-page poem, but then I had this idea of writing a poem within a poem. The poem within the poem was something I was really excited about, although it has never been done before so I didn't know if it was a good idea or a really confusing idea, with a lot of critiques from my peers I made the poem within the poem worked in a clear and understandable way. The way the poem within the poem works is that with letters and words of my first poem I started putting them in bold font and with that a second poem started having shape. Writing this poem was super fun, stressful, challenging and a beautiful experienced. Throughout this project, I've learned a lot about myself as a writer and a person.
Poetry Reflection This Semester we were asked to write a poem. The theme of the poem was open but we needed to write about something that we were interested on. For this poem I wrote about how you should always look for hope even in difficult times and how it feels to be hopeless. In this poem I first started writing about being hopeless.Throughout the poem my perspective started changing/evolving. We can see this comparing my first and last draft. In my first draft I started writing about having hope and then losing it.
The first draft of my poem starts with “Await the light, at the end of the tunnel,Fight! For the light at the end of the tunnel.” and ends with“In this world where crying is being weak ,and feelings are unexpressed”. As I got critiques from my peers I decided that my poem was gonna be more powerful if it started with losing hope and then ended it with finding hope. In my final draft, the poem starts with an opening question “Should I? Or Shouldn't I”? This opening question leads you to explain you that there's no more hope left and then the poem ends with the line “show the dreamers that they can reach the stars and the hopeless that there's still hope.” This line was intended to leave you believing that there will always be hope.
I think one of the biggest changes I've made this year as a poet is being able to express myself more and being able to write all my thoughts and feelings down in a piece of paper. At the beginning of this project I was scared to write my feelings down because I was scared that people were gonna read it and judge it, but as time passed and in Lori class we started writing poems and then critiquing I became more confident and I started slowly overcoming this fear. As I overcome this fear I was able to write more so my poem length grew. We can see the change in my poems comparing the length of my first draft to my final poem. First Draft: Await the light at the end of the tunnel. Fight! For the light at the end of tunnel. Wait. there's still hope. Tell all the seekers that their journey has finalize. They've made it. There's still HOPE. Gather all the hopeless and tell them to keep fighting They are almost there.. Final poem: Should I? Or shouldn't I(N)? Do we stay trApped? Or do we escape?
In this WORLD WHERE crying is beIng weak, And feelings are being held captive . Where words A(M)re HELD SILENT, AND thoughts are BEGGING TO SCREAM. In this world WHERE a telephone vIbrates more than A(M) beating heart, In this world where we see more masks Than smiles.
Await the light, at the end of the tunnel, Fight! For the light at the end of the tunnel. Fight! For all those people who hide their wrists and ankles, Fight! Like someone who is HOLDING their last hold of breath Fight! Like someone who is trying to find their place in the world before they have to leave. Fight! Like a girl WAITING for her dad, Fight! Like a castaway gettIng to land. Fight! For all those people who HAVE LOST HOPE.
Wait. there's still hope. Tell all the seekers that their journey has finalized. They've made it. There's still HOPE. Gather all the hopeless and tell them to keep fIghting, Tell the castaway he is gonna get to land, Tell all the people that: They are A(M)lmost there. They've made it.
Now is your turn! Now you have to Escape! Now is your fight! Now is time to raise your voice, this is our fight! Show the dreamers that they can reach the stars, and the HOPELESS that there's still hope.
Another big change I made from early drafts to the final draft was to start using more poetic devices. When I started writing this poem I wasn't used to writing and expressing myself with poetic devices like metaphors, similes, oxymoron etc. I was used to write everything in “plain” english, as I was conferencing with Lori and my peers throughout the middle of this process they told me that I need it to made a language boost in my poem. So I started applying poetic devices in my poem we can see this if we compare my first draft and one of my final drafts (draft #5). In my first draft In the second verse I said “Fight! For all of those people who have seen their dreams drown. Fight for all those people who have lost hope” This two lines although they express my message they didn't use poetic devices so they didn't sound as poetic, When I made the poetic boost that verse ended up looking like this: Fight! For all those people who hide their wrists and ankles, Fight! Like someone who is HOLDING their last hold of breath Fight! Like someone who is trying to find their place in the world before they have to leave. Fight! Like a girl WAITING for her dad, Fight! Like a castaway gettIng to land. Fight! For all those people who HAVE LOST HOPE. In this final verse we can see how I used more metaphors and similes to express the same message but in a more poetic way. I think this change improves the message of my poem because it makes it more clear. I also think that by using more poetic devices the experience of the reader gets deeper and it makes it easier for the reader to connect in an emotional way to the poem. When I finished writing this poem I still wanted to express the feeling of being trapped so I had the idea of using poetic license and create a poem within the poem that expressed this feeling. I did this by putting in bold letters the second poem using the words of the first poem. My first poem without the poem within the poem look like this: Should I? Or shouldn't I? Do we stay trapped? Or Do we escape? In this world where crying is being weak, And feelings are unexpressed. Where words are being held silent, And thoughts are begging to be shouted. In this world where we see more masks Than smiles.
Await the light, at the end of the tunnel, Fight! For the light at the end of the tunnel. Fight! For all those people who hide their wrists and ankles, Fight! For all those people who have seen their dreams drown in a sea of tears, Fight! For all those people who have lost hope.
Wait. there's still hope. Tell all the seekers that their journey has finalize. They've made it. There's still HOPE. Gather all the hopeless and tell them to keep fighting They are almost there. They´ve made it.
Know is your turn! Raise your voice, this is our fight! Show the dreamers that they can reach the stars, and the hopeless that there's still hope.
The poem within the poem looks like this: Should I? Or shouldn't I(N)? Do we stay trApped? Or do we escape?
In this WORLD WHERE crying is beIng weak, And feelings are being held captive . Where words A(M)re HELD SILENT, AND thoughts are BEGGING TOSCREAM. In this world WHERE a telephone vIbrates more than A(M) beating heart, In this world where we see more masks Than smiles.
Await the light, at the end of the tunnel, Fight! For the light at the end of the tunnel. Fight! For all those people who hide their wrists and ankles, Fight! Like someone who is HOLDING their last hold of breath Fight! Like someone who is trying to find their place in the world before they have to leave. Fight! Like a girl WAITING for her dad, Fight! Like a castaway gettIng to land. Fight! For all those people who HAVE LOST HOPE.
Wait. there's still hope. Tell all the seekers that their journey has finalized. They've made it. There's still HOPE. Gather all the hopeless and tell them to keep fIghting, Tell the castaway he is gonna get to land, Tell all the people that: They are A(M)lmost there. They´vemade it.
Now is your turn! voice, this is our fight! Show the dreamers that they can reach the stars, and the HOPELESS that there's still hope. Now you have to Escape! Now is your fight! Now is time to raise your I felt that my poem needed this poetic boost so it could sign more poetic.